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Story (i start, you contribute)

Ok, jinx told me to put it here, so if it should be somewhere else blame her!! i wanted to write something for aminals thread but my head is jumbled. i only got out a few shrot sentences and realized i had no clue where i was going with this. SO heres the first part, add on accordingly. (please dont turn this into some japscat/porn/death/murder/gay type thing) I wanna see some effort I might give out points to the best contributers. I'll be coming back and adding if i can think of anything to add.

Thanks have fun.



She woke up and swung her legs over the side of the bed, lifting her arm to block the sun from her eyes. After a few moments, she removed her arm from her face and let her freshly awakened eyes adjust to the harsh sunlight. The white beams shined into the room from in between slightly opened pink blinds. She reached over and touched a button on her alarm clock to stop it from turning on in a few minutes. First time I've ever been up before the alarm, she thought. She usually slept through it. Something was different this morning.


(only the first reply will be the one you extend upon...this might get a bit confusing. but confusing is fun!

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She felt a tingling in her left arm. She fell over, dead, from a heart attack.

TEH EDN!!!!111

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and SP's post will be disregarded.

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A stagnant strangeness was strangling her. A combersome feeling seeped through her body, as she stretched. Her shoulders popped and crackled and she let out a satisfied sigh. She took baby steps out of her room, attempting to avoid waking the others with her squeaky floor. She pulled a plain white towel from the industrail-like shelf and headed for the bathroom.

She whinced as her right foot touched the chilly bathroom floor. This chill travelled up her feet, legs, spine, and sat in the rifts in her shoulders that were just produced a few moments ago. Her shoulders were filled again. This feeling couldn't be shaken. She turned the hot water up, and steam slowly clouded her visions. She stared at herself, as her reflection was slowly eaten by the cloudiness.

edit: making sense of the retarded post

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You can't change the rules just because someone beat you at yer game.

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She brought her small hand to her eye and touched it gently, wincing at the pain it brought. The black and blue mark was fading to a purple yellow tint. She closed her eyes and breathed out heavily. She dropped the towel on the floor and stepped into the shower letting the scaulding water run down her body.

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...said the voice inside her head, she chose to ignore it, as she usually did when it said things like "kill your parents" and "a spot of curry would be nice" and move on...

*edit: this was meant to follow SP's post. See you fucked up my funny, Kayla.

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if no one is gonna take this seriously then forget about it. sorry i tried to do something fun/interesting.

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Oh, quit being such an emotional and moody cunt and get on with your life. Obviously creativity is a concept far from you. "Disregard SP's post because I can't think of anything to follow it up with." Blah blah blah.

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:+: yep

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You don't do much improv, do you?

The whole concept behind it is that you work with what you are given and continue to do so. There could have been a million possiblities to follow my post, but you chose to take the easy way out because it didn't run with your own personal idiom.

"It would have ended my story."

Creative is not you.

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You guys are nuts. Stop fighting.
Here. You happy now?

She woke up and swung her legs over the side of the bed, disoriented in the darkness, dream voices coaxing her to slide back down into their world.

She shuddered. She had to stop hanging out online so much. The nightmares weren't worth it.

She could still see "TEH EDN!!!!111" if she closed her eyes.

No, mustn't close her eyes.

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quote:
Originally posted by Kayla
She brought her small hand to her eye and touched it gently, wincing at the pain it brought. The black and blue mark was fading to a purple yellow tint. She closed her eyes and breathed out heavily. She dropped the towel on the floor and stepped into the shower letting the scaulding water run down her body.


At that moment a jet of ice water streamed out of the shower nozzle onto her exposed body. She screamed in shock, quickly straightening her body and sliding to the edge of the shower, out of the water.

"That bastard," she thought, "He did it again. If he does that one more time..."

A thousand hateful and angry scenarios popped into her mind, while thinking about him. She was sick of it. Everyday it was the same thing.

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She pulled herself away from the water, testing it every so often with her finger tips, waiting for the warm water to return. It did after a few minutes, but by then she just wanted to rinse her hair and get out. No relaxing shower for me, again, today she thought angrily. Once again the cold tile shocks her feet as she steps out of the shower. She wraps the large white towel around her body and rings out her hair. She leaned back against the wall, closing her eyes, wishing she could start this day over again when she heard the phone.

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You people are weird.

She can't think of anything creative, SP? Your "ending" was much better.

*twirls a finger*

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Some people just can't get over tiny little bumps in the road, can they?

One direction it could have went: A frustrated writer that can't think of anything, and so in a fit of frustartation suddenly kills the character and scribbled "TEH EDN!!!!"

That was just off the top of my head.

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She pulled herself away from the water, testing it every so often with her finger tips, waiting for the warm water to return. It did after a few minutes, but by then she just wanted to rinse her hair and get out. No relaxing shower for me, again, today she thought angrily. Once again the cold tile shocks her feet as she steps out of the shower. She wraps the large white towel around her body and rings out her hair. She leaned back against the wall, closing her eyes, wishing she could start this day over again when she heard the phone.


Fear tore through her body.

"He's not supposed to call yet!" she thought.

If that insane man she once loved and now lives with in terror found out about her new secret, he would surely kill her.

The phone rang again. And again.

"Are you going to fucking get that?", a brash deep voice shouted from the hallway.

"Yes. I'll get it!" she nervously quivered back.

She took a breath and picked up the reciever.

"H-h-hello?" She barely managed to get that out.

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"good morning madam, we are calling to offer you a free gift..."

Relief washed over her, tainted with the usual mild annoyance of telephone solicitaion.

She listenened at length at the monotonous sales pitch, waiting for the opportunity to simple say "no thank you, I'm really not interested", when she heard the second line *beep*.

In her frustration, she forgot her panic of only moments ago and quickly told the telemarketer, "look, I got another call" and switched lines.

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"good morning madam, we are calling to offer you a free gift..."

Relief washed over her, tainted with the usual mild annoyance of telephone solicitaion.

She listenened at length at the monotonous sales pitch, waiting for the opportunity to simple say "no thank you, I'm really not interested", when she heard the second line *beep*.

In her frustration, she forgot her panic of only moments ago and quickly told the telemarketer, "look, I got another call" and switched lines.



A nervous voice trembled, "Hello, is Elise there?"

Realizing what she had done, she couldn't manage to speak. She sat beside the phone with her mouth hanging slightly open and one hand grasping the wet towel she had wrapped around her slender torso. Seconds seemed to turn into hours as she held the telephone receiver to her ear.

"H-hello?" the familiar voice repeated.

Elise finally found the strength to speak.

"Why are you calling NOW?" she whispered into the phone, in an attempt to hide the call from her crazed boyfriend.

"Well, I..." the voice from the telephone started.

Elise was shocked by another booming shout coming from the hallway.

"Who the HELL is it!?!?" the impatient man bellowed.

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She looked down in terror, trying to avert her eyes from his piercing glare.

"It's just a telemarketer, Hon. He is offering a free gift. I'm sorry."

He looked at her in disgust, grabbed the reciever, and slammed it down with a huge THUD! His empathy and kindness had deminsihed years ago when he first reached for the bottle. Time lapsed, and she could see the two of them happy, in love. She specifically remembered his best friend's party. They mingled in several social groups, and everyone continuously told them "You're a perfect couple." and "You're going to have the most darling babies!" It felt like decades had passed since then.

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"You didn't have to be so rude" She said, shooting a defiant glance his way.
He scoffed and shrugged his usual shrug and walked away from her. She realized that she was still standing there dripping wet, in her towel. She hurried off to the bedroom, she wasn't about to give him a chance to make some crude remark about her body. She collapsed onto the bed, pulling a pillow under her head. She laid there for what seemed like hours, watching the fan above her head spin lazily. Looking over at the clock she realized that she didn't have much time left. Walking over to her dresser she pulled out some plain underwear and dark nondistinguishable clothes. Dark beige khakis and a pea green t shirt. She looked herself over in the mirror and realized that she had to change her shirt, there was a bruise the size of a plum on her right arm. She sighed and wiped a tear from her eye as she began to search thru her drawers for something with long sleeves. Something to cover another bruise.

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"You didn't have to be so rude" She said, shooting a defiant glance his way.
He scoffed and shrugged his usual shrug and walked away from her. She realized that she was still standing there dripping wet, in her towel. She hurried off to the bedroom, she wasn't about to give him a chance to make some crude remark about her body. She collapsed onto the bed, pulling a pillow under her head. She laid there for what seemed like hours, watching the fan above her head spin lazily. Looking over at the clock she realized that she didn't have much time left. Walking over to her dresser she pulled out some plain underwear and dark nondistinguishable clothes. Dark beige khakis and a pea green t shirt. She looked herself over in the mirror and realized that she had to change her shirt, there was a bruise the size of a plum on her right arm. She sighed and wiped a tear from her eye as she began to search thru her drawers for something with long sleeves. Something to cover another bruise.



She slowly sifted through the drawers of clothing, pulling out promising articles of clothing. One by one, Elise held them up to her body while looking in the mirror, checking sleeve length. As she looked at each shirt and blouse, she became more and more frustrated with her life, translating into anger at her apparent lack of decent clothing. At last she decided on a loose fitting, long sleeved black shirt purely out of disgust.

She gathered up her clothing and headed for the bathroom, muttering to herself and forgetting the piles of clothing she had left on the bed and floor.

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She stepped back into the bathroom, not enjoying the moistness left over from her shower earlier. It made her feel sticky and dirty again. She disregarded it and put on her clothes. Just as she was finished dressing, a banging on the door. It startled her. With a long sigh she opened the door and stared him right in the face.

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"Hi! I'm Moriece from the Welcome Wagon!" said the 5 foot tall bisexual gym instructor.

"And I'm Gary, also from the before mentioned Wagon!" tossed in Gary, the slightly taller, although portly, accountant, suspenders and all.

"Err... what?" she said, a bit confused about what a Moriece and a Gary from the welcome wagon wanted to do with her.

"Allow me to explain, whenever someone new moves into the neighborhood myself and my boyfriend Gary go out and greet them. You know, make them feel like they are a part of the community here."

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